I got accepted as a Google Certified Trainer this month. It is a certification of showing skills to teach how to apply Google for Education at schools.
It was not my first attempt to apply. I tried about five times as I remember but had been rejected. Though it was free to apply, apparently it was more challenging than I thought. I retook my introductory video of my candidate and asked advice from another trainer, but every time the result was the same. I was sort of giving up to get certified and did not retry awhile.
This time I found a new opening entry (I suppose), which is non-English but in English. There was a Japanese entry opening but I thought it would be fun to try in English because it might seem more attractive for people in charge of Human Resources. I retook a video and translated documents to fill in the applications with many updates. It was an interesting and fulfilling moment to challenge new things.
I got the result in three weeks and I was accepted finally. It is the beginning of a new journey and I will keep track of how to apply Google at schools practically. I am so excited to learn from other trainers and the community of Google for education.
Modified
I am thrilled to announce that I have been accepted as a Google Certified Trainer this month. This certification recognizes my ability to effectively teach the application of Google for Education in schools.
Obtaining this certification was not an easy feat. I had made several attempts, approximately five as far as I can recall, but faced rejection each time. Despite the application process being free, it proved to be more challenging than I had initially anticipated. In my pursuit, I even reworked my introductory video and sought advice from another trainer, yet the outcome remained unchanged. I reached a point where I felt discouraged and refrained from retrying for a while.
However, this time, I stumbled upon a new entry opportunity, which was conducted in English rather than Japanese. Although a Japanese entry was available, I decided to try the English option, as it might be more appealing to the individuals responsible for Human Resources. I revamped my video, translated the necessary documents, and incorporated numerous updates into my application. It was an invigorating and fulfilling experience to embark on something new.
After three weeks of anticipation, I received the long-awaited result: acceptance. This marks the beginning of an exciting new journey for me, and I am eager to explore practical applications of Google in educational settings. I am particularly thrilled to learn from fellow trainers and engage with the Google for Education community.
Estimated Scores:
TOEFL Writing:
Original Passage: 4.5/5 (Very Good)
Modified Passage: 5/5 (Excellent)
IELTS Writing:
Original Passage: 7/9 (Good user)
Modified Passage: 7.5/9 (Good user)
Comments:
The original passage effectively conveys the author’s achievement and experiences, while the modified version refines the language and structure for improved clarity and readability. The modifications enhance the flow of ideas and maintain a consistent tone throughout the text.
Change Mode:
Original Passage:
“I got accepted as a Google Certified Trainer this month. It is a certification of showing skills to teach how to apply Google for Education at schools.
It was not my first attempt to apply. I tried about five times as I remember but had been rejected. Though it was free to apply, apparently it was more challenging than I thought. I retook my introductory video of my candidate and asked advice from another trainer, but every time the result was the same. I was sort of giving up to get certified and did not retry awhile.
This time I found a new opening entry (I suppose), which is non-English but in English. There was a Japanese entry opening but I thought it would be fun to try in English because it might seem more attractive for people in charge of Human Resources. I retook a video and translated documents to fill in the applications with many updates. It was an interesting and fulfilling moment to challenge new things.
I got the result in three weeks and I was accepted finally. It is the beginning of a new journey and I will keep track of how to apply Google at schools practically. I am so excited to learn from other trainers and the community of Google for education.”
Changes Made:
“I am thrilled to announce that I have been accepted as a Google Certified Trainer this month. This certification recognizes my ability to effectively teach the application of Google for Education in schools.
Obtaining this certification was not an easy feat. I had made several attempts, approximately five as far as I can recall, but faced rejection each time. Despite the application process being free, it proved to be more challenging than I had initially anticipated. In my pursuit, I even reworked my introductory video and sought advice from another trainer, yet the outcome remained unchanged. I reached a point where I felt discouraged and refrained from retrying for a while.
However, this time, I stumbled upon a new entry opportunity,
which was conducted in English rather than Japanese. Although a Japanese entry was available, I decided to try the English option, as it might be more appealing to the individuals responsible for Human Resources. I revamped my video, translated the necessary documents, and incorporated numerous updates into my application. It was an invigorating and fulfilling experience to embark on something new.
After three weeks of anticipation, I received the long-awaited result: acceptance. This marks the beginning of an exciting new journey for me, and I am eager to explore practical applications of Google in educational settings. I am particularly thrilled to learn from fellow trainers and engage with the Google for Education community.”
Comments:
The modified passage maintains the original meaning while refining sentence structure, word choice, and overall clarity. It improves the flow and coherence of the text, resulting in a more engaging and polished piece of writing.
